Come on at least TRY
I feel like this is appropriate.
i honestly don’t know why deviantart just doesn’t forbid bases at this point. they’re really just being abused.
TO MAKE IT EVEN WORSE: THIS IS A MARY SUE! …but why does she have a voice actress? and more importantly, why is her birthday the day before mine?
Name: Lacaria
Gender: Female
Voice Actress: Penelope Crúz
Age: 1,500 years, Lv. 45
Rank: second in command of Crystal’s Army
Birthday: September 15
Species: Pink and black Lucario
Family: Dash (triplet son), Rio (triplet son), and Ria (triplet daughter)
Personality: Optimistic, caring, smart, playful, and hyperactive
Quirks: Naivety and partial fear of developing relationships
Powers: Aura Sphere, Dark Pulse, Dragon Pulse, Psychic, Inner Focus, Aura Storm, and light affinity
Background Story: Laki was an average happy Lucario living her freedom a thousand years ago. But she suddenly is forced to marry an evil Lucario named X’ng. She barely escapes and ends up captured by Terotrey’s ancestors. Unfortunately, X’ng has also been captured and nominated as the homeowner’s official pet. He has raped Laki, beaten her, and left her to die in her cage. But when the electrical power goes down, she escapes with the remaining energy she had and meets Crystal at the entrance. As they flee, they agree to start a rebelling army to stop Terotrey’s family from overtaking the universe. They have lived for thousands of years and Laki has produced immortal triplets in the process. Both girls have the solid belief that Terotrey’s ancestors must have injected something into their bodies from aging or changing. Since then, Crystal and Laki have turned into best friends. Despite that Laki is afraid of her past, she remains strong and brave even in the toughest situations. Gallade falls in love with her at first sight, but Laki doesn’t realize this until later in the story. After some hesitation for her part, she accepts Gallade after seeing everything that he has done for the team. She continues to support the heroes and is expressively happy to see Crystal and Zoroark together. She grows more happy when she sees Raven and Lily again. But her excitement diminishes when Crystal is found beaten and raped one night. Angry, Laki goes to war against Terotrey with the heroes and plans to kill Eclipso for hurting her best friend. But during the battle, Laki is stricken when her children and Gallade are killed by the exiled Legendaries. Her grief distracts her enough to let the exiled Legendaries strike her down and kill her next. Laki’s spirit joins the other deceased heroes in the afterlife. She is shown to be with Gallade as they watch the Riolu triplets play near a lake.
Interesting Facts: Laki is not considered a shiny Pokémon. She has developed her pink and black fur through a very rare recessive gene from her mother. She had the light affinity and is later revealed as Crystal’s soul piece for heart. She is one of the only three people (Ash, Crystal, and herself) with the Aura Storm ability.
>She grows more happy
Also:
Why does it have to be a recessive gene?
You know what else is a recessive gene?
Having five fingers.
And after 1,500 years she’s only Level 45?
I mean, I get it if you’re trying to stop the character from being some absurdly powerful sue, but
Your character has to be practical. I mean, characters who are hundreds of years old don’t have to be powerful, but for god’s sakes it’s pokemon. Not to mention she overthrew some terrible empire or something, and did a lot of fighting it seems.
I honestly don’t know. This is such longwinded and complicated background story I stopped reading it because I don’t even understand it. If you’re introducing the character, keep it as brief and simple as you can. I mean, after a thousand and a half years, YEAH you’re going to have a LOT happen to this character, but we needn’t know every detail. If I could finish this description, I could probably easily shorten it.
Honestly what’s being described sounds more like what should be the character’s role in whatever story. It honestly sounds like a kind of plot summary that you’d find on like Wikipedia or something. It is fun to think about your characters, setting, plot, etc. like that sometimes, but that’s not always the best way to introduce them.
But above all, reblogging for THIS:
i honestly don’t know why deviantart just doesn’t forbid bases at this point. they’re really just being abused.
the sonic wikia is seriously full of people uploading pictures like this, thank god none of them have the audacity to put them on anything other than their user pages
I just can;tsrhkfdjk;sfasdjk;fasdjk;basdfk;bjasdfjk;fbsda
Can’t tell if it got better or worse
“Taka is a young, rambonscious ten year old trainer with a loud mouth and the naivity of a three year old. “
Etc
NEW EYES
NEW CHARACTER
